قصيدتي بلانكليزي من تاليفي صححولي ياها وانطوني رايكم

hello
I read your poem and I like it
but I can't correct it because I'm not good in english

wonderful words
but honey writng poetry n English is a difficult thing
so you need a specialized person to coreect you
i suggest you not to make it apoem
just leave it as it comes from your heart and dont bother yourself in the structure of a poem
believe me if you try to write it as it comes from your heart it will be better . it will be more than wonderful
ok
if you write it again please let me know , i am waiting.
BYE

اسرار الامل
i like your way in writing
there are a person that correct it to me ...every thing in red means it was wrong and i correct it...
thank u veru much
بارك الله فيكي

hi
you have corrected it grammatically only
you dont only need the grammatical correction you need the pattern of a poem
look honey in the English poetry you need
1/ rhyme
2/ rhythm
3/rhyme scheme
4/a metre
5/a structure
read this poem written by Alexander pope
A little learning is a dangerous thing,
Drink deep or taste not the Pierian spring
There shallow draughts intoxicate the prain
Drinking largely sobers us again.
so it is a difficult thing to write poetry
leave it again as it come from your heart
forgive me if i am bothering you with my comments
BYE

oooooooooooooooooooooook my friend
thank u sooooooooooo much
الله يسعدكي ^_^

very nice
my dear
your words touch the heart deeply
keep it up
but you shuold read and learn
and
keep learning POETRY
May God help YOU

thank u very much
ان اشاء الله
الله يسعدكي ^_^

وشلون افهمها ترجميعها اعربي
مشكوره حلووه مع انها مافهمت ولا شي

my sadness learn me
iam nothing without you.....
iam lost without you....
i cann`t over come my sadness without you....
iam bad person without you.....
icann`t recognize the right thing from bad without you ....
you are every thing in my life.....
when my tears coverd my cheek ... and my heart is bleeding from sadness
and every one leave s me and no one ask me what wrong with you......
when i hate myself and my life and i cann`t find any one to hear me
or feel what i am feeling ....
i see you ...take care of me .....
i feel you ...like you told me don`t be sad...iam with you...just be patient......
My God....i love you.....and iam lost with out you....so....please don`t leave me...
i ask you to fill every cell in my body with your love ...and make me strong and good person....
my god...forgive me about every thing bad i ma d e it...
and thank you about every thing good you given it to me...
سبحانك اللهم وبحمدك اشهد ان لا اله الا انت استغفرك اللهم واتوب اليك
انا لا شي بدونك
انا ضائعة بدونك
انا لا استطيع اتغلب على حزني بدونك
انا شخص سيء بدونك
لا استطيع التمييز بين الشي الصح والخطأ بدونك
انت كل شي بحياتي
عندما تغطي الدموع وجهي وقلبي ينزف من الحزن وكل شخص تركني ولا احد سالي ماذا بك
عندما اكره نفسي وحياتي ولا ارى اي شخص حتى يسمعني او يحس بالي ادحس بيه
اراك تعتني بي اشعر بك ... كانك تقول لي لا تحزني انا معك لكن اصبري
يارب انا احبك وانا ضائعة من دونك ارجوك يارب لا تتركني
اسالك يارب بان تملا كل خلية في جسمي بحبك وتجعلني قوية وشخص جيد
يارب سامحني على كل شي سيئ قمت به واشكرك على كل شي جيد اعطتني اياه